Clarity And Style

1459066_554381814643945_431506789_nThe eight year old Alice Krupitsky wrote this essay. This is clearly written prose. She is a good stylist. There is not a single word that would send a reader to the dictionary. Among all the editors I have worked with, there is not a single one who can write more clearly. (If you think that I am exaggerating, read two of them here: Ashok Bhattacharya, Indivjal Dhasmana)

Now, read the 60 year old Shyam Lal‘s  judgment on the Aarushi murder case:

“The cynosure of judicial determination is the fluctuating fortunes of the dentist couple Dr. Rajesh Talwar and Dr. Nupur Talwar, who have been arraigned for committing and secreting as also deracinating the evidence of commission of the murder of their own adolescent daughter — a beaut damsel and sole heiress Ms. Aarushi and hapless domestic aide Hemraj, who had migrated to India from neighbouring Nepal to eke out living and attended routinely to the chores of domestic drudgery at the house of their masters.”

I have no idea what this means. No one else knows what this means either. This—-Is the work of a stupid man. I do not think there is any other explanation for this. A sixty-year-old judge cannot plead inexperience. I am not willing to believe than an eight-year-old girl has had more experience, as a writer. It is possible to argue that “he is a judge and not a writer.” But, I am not buying that. If you are a bad writer, it is simply because you cannot think clearly. I think this is true of academics and journalists too. If they think otherwise, it is because they have no self-knowledge. This man must have sent many innocent people to the gallows.

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